WARNING: This story contains adult themes and may not be suitable for younger viewers. Parental discretion is advised.
Story has been deleted, thread kept in place so that you'll know what happened. Sorry about this, please PM me with any concerns.
Wow. That end came out of nowhere. Oh, very good. Very short, but very good. I was convinced of the narrator's love until the last. And she's only 10? Geez. Excellent work.
It wasn't until the rereading that the significance of the phrase 'first time' in this context sank in. Whose story is this, anyway???
It is good writing, but I think I need to point out our Code of Conduct (http://www.thecbg.org/e107_plugins/forum/forum_viewtopic.php?22560), in particular, the next to last code:
"Please do not post any adult content on the site. There are many younger viewers, as well as the occasional parent, and we want this site to remain friendly to all viewers."
Feel free to PM me about this if you have concerns or questions.