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Title: Help Me Title my Poem
Post by: Tombowings on March 15, 2008, 12:55:16 AM
I wrote this poem a couple days ago, but am stuck on what to name it. I was wondering if you good people could help me out.
Warning: This is a still a work in progress and is a bit rough in places.

I leave today, no man may I be,
trying not to remember what you promised of me.
And I praise the lord as I call your name.
Tears run down my face as a board this train.
But you will never meet, who I said I will be
In time I would grow, and you, learn to see.

The engine belows, beginning to cruise.
Bowing my head unto an empty moon.
Wind howls by, pictures start to fade,
passing by the premises I shouldn't have made.
I throw my hands up, it's over now,
But I won't take my leave, I won't take my bow.
Title: Help Me Title my Poem
Post by: Elemental_Elf on March 15, 2008, 01:20:28 AM
Wow, that is a really cool poem, very well written! :)

As for a title... how about:

 "Goodbye from a Train"
"Leaving on a Train"
"Simply Goodbye"
"Me, a Tear"

... Well I'm not sure what to title this. Why not call it "Untitled 2008"? :P
Title: Help Me Title my Poem
Post by: limetom on March 15, 2008, 03:31:47 AM
Pretty good stuff.

Many authors never gave a title to their poems and later editors use just the first line as the title.
Title: Help Me Title my Poem
Post by: sparkletwist on March 16, 2008, 01:54:12 PM
Or, you could always title it something completely irrelevant. I like doing that, but I'm weird. :D
Title: Help Me Title my Poem
Post by: Hibou on March 16, 2008, 10:32:27 PM
It sounds to me like it could use something simple, like "Tracks".
Title: Help Me Title my Poem
Post by: Tombowings on March 17, 2008, 12:17:27 AM
Quote from: WickedTrollIt sounds to me like it could use something simple, like "Tracks".

I kinda like that, actually.
Title: Help Me Title my Poem
Post by: Tombowings on March 18, 2008, 11:11:48 PM
Ok, the poem is to be titled, "Dear Perrin."

This was originally a song for the love I lost, and I should name it so.