Here's a bit of positive feedback, which is rarely as useful as negative, but it's what I've got.
First, that's a wonderful piece of prose for an introduction. As an avid reader, that rates high. You've got a talent, my friend, and I hope to see more works.
Second, these two sentences sparked my interest sincere, because it smacks that the setting will feature social commentary on urbanization and economy, which indicates all kinds of good things about it.
Time for sleep! But I will keep reading.
First, that's a wonderful piece of prose for an introduction. As an avid reader, that rates high. You've got a talent, my friend, and I hope to see more works.
Second, these two sentences sparked my interest sincere, because it smacks that the setting will feature social commentary on urbanization and economy, which indicates all kinds of good things about it.
Quote from: MysterMeBut anyway, it wasn't like he had a choice: the City was where the real money was. It was the land of Opportunity.
Time for sleep! But I will keep reading.