My Campaign

[jasonguppy]

Hi everyone, i'm new here.  I would just like to get my DnD campaign up here.  I have a basic intro document and will elaborate. :explode:

[Magnus Pym]

Welcome to the CBG Jason

[jasonguppy]

Thanks.  Just skimmed over Plaguelands and Primeval, look nice.  This will have dinosaurs...

[Kindling]

Welcome! Look forward to seeing your stuff :)

[Magnus Pym]

Yeah Primeval is a setting I've been working on for some time. Though I recently realised the huge problem with it is I tried too much to think big. Since my inspirations changed a little bit I started Plaguelands, which is a single region and, I foresee, will meet more success for the time being. I still have grand visions for Primeval though, especially concerning dinosaurs and primitive styles of life.

[Xathan]

Hey Jason! This is Cephalian from the SE boards - looking forward to seeing what you come up with that isn't for speculative evolution.

[jasonguppy]

Hi Cpehalian!

I don't think my attachment worked...

[Superfluous Crow]

Welcome! And no, I don't think it worked, I don't see anything I can press to download your file.

EDIT: If you'd rather not copy the document into a forum post you can use the free program dropbox to make a public link which you can post here and then everyone can access your file using that.

[Seraph]

Yeah, I don't see anything other than a passing reference to dinosaurs.  Waiting for more, though.

[jasonguppy]

Welcome! And no, I don't think it worked, I don't see anything I can press to download your file.

EDIT: If you'd rather not copy the document into a forum post you can use the free program dropbox to make a public link which you can post here and then everyone can access your file using that.

https://www.dropbox.com/home#:::41763639

That should be it

[Seraph]

I'm still not seeing anything.  Just seems to take me to the generic Drop-Box home page.  

[Ninja D!]

I got the same result as Seraphine. I'll warn you, though, that you're probably only getting so solid of a response to an outside document because you just joined. Usually, you will get a couple of people to look at those but you will get much more feedback from things that you actually post here.

[jasonguppy]

Well, i guess ill do it bit by bit:
3.   Themes
   Exotic Trade
   Oceans of Salt Water
   Undead
   Constructs
   Guns
   Boats
   Dinosaurs
   Cosmopolitan
   Magic is Common
   Advanced Tech level (Pistols, Muskets, etc.)
4.        The land of Maeluen is an earthlike planet: Spherical, and about the same size.  It has five major continents.  The first, Al-Qadim, is a beautiful Arabian land of expansive deserts and desert mirages.  It has broad deserts and coastal bay for trading.  The second, the Crescent Archipelago, is a long, carribean-esque, archipelago that starts at a center large island known as Bastrio.  The Archipelago is home to pirates, clothing traders, and flashy styles of fighting.  The third is known as Mujhar, an ancient land reminiscent of Feudal Japan, home to sneaky ninjas, loyal samurai, and cultural rarities.  Frio is a wall community in the far north, a Venice-like city at its fringe.  The city has many canals, but this is the end of civilization.  The majority of this continent is undiscovered and hunted by tribes of Uldra and Tundra Halflings.  The final continent is the feral land of Zx'ynt.  It is home to Mayan civilizations of elves, evil arboreal goblins, and dinosaurs roaming the land.  

[jasonguppy]

Herei t is attached
File: 1303049291_1296_FT188878_dnd_campaign_1.pdf

[Seraph]

Starting Location-
a. Continent- Al-Qadim
b. Country- Golden Coast
c. City- Slateport
d. Buildings of Interest-
i. Serpent Shipyard
ii. Drunken Gnome Inn
iii. Xitang's Armory
iv. One Eye Lizard General Store
v. Old Gru's Food Shop
vi. Bridge of Shells
vii. Murk Island
7. Questions for your players
a. Who are you?
b. What is your backstory?
c. Who in your life is/was very close to you?
d. What do you like to do?
e. What do you hate?
f. What terrifies you?
g. Why are you adventuring?

I take it you are still early in the process of building this setting.  It's good to see in the above that you are thinking of this setting in terms of your players, and focusing on one particular place.  The fact that the setting is presented primarily as a platform for gaming tells me more about it than anything else in here.  The information in here is no more than cursory, but if you add in some NPCs of note in this town and something for the PCs to do, you'd probably have just enough to run a game.

It will take a lot more work to make a setting with any kind of internal consistency, or that would seem immersive.  All we know about it really is that there are dinosaurs, and 5 continents that vaguely resemble places on earth.  We only know this by your say-so, though.  We don't really have any features of the world to look at and say "ow wow, this reminds me a lot of feudal Japan" because you just say that it's like feudal Japan.

Give us a bit more.  How many establishments are there?  We don't need an exact number, but "A lot of small villages" or "Only a few cities," or "Some big cities with a few villages scattered in between" or whatever the situation is would be nice.
How common are dinosaurs?  How much of a danger do they pose to everyday folk?  Are they enough of a threat to make small villages rare because they'd all get stomped by T-Rexes every week, or are most of the dinosaurs the little ones small enough to beat off with a stick?  Are dinosaurs kept as a form of livestock?  As mounts?  Are their organs, claws, teeth, etc. desirable by collectors and/or mages (for spell components, I'd guess).  You say that magic is common.  How common?   Is there a wizard on every block?  Are there not so many mages, but magic-items all over the place made by magic-factories?  Is there a bunch of magical technology, in the sense of televisions operated by illusion magic, ovens that use pyromancy to cook food, magical artificial light, etc.?