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Epic Meepo

#75
March 20, 2006, 09:09:43 PM
Regarding penguins, associating them with passion is no less silly than Lovecraft choosing to prominently feature giant albino penguins in a horror story, something that he has indeed done.
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Soup Nazi

#76
March 20, 2006, 09:12:52 PM
Quote from: Epic_MeepoRegarding penguins, associating them with passion is no less silly than Lovecraft choosing to prominently feature giant albino penguins in a horror story, something that he has indeed done.
LOL! You're reading waaay to munch into this. It really is just a joke.
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Numinous

#77
March 23, 2006, 06:25:27 PM
Alright, I think i finally have my pantheons worked up to the point where I can start building other things...  so can anyone tell me where to go next?  I realize I definitely haven't done everything, but i'm lost as to where to go next...  any ideas?
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- Currently working on: The Smoking Hills - A bottom-up, seat-of-my-pants, fairy tale adventure!

Soup Nazi

#78
March 23, 2006, 06:40:17 PM
start describing the people of Godswalk. I want to hear about these troll/fae and other interesting races. Where do they live? What are their cultures like? what kind of nations do they live in?

I also want to know about the goegraphy of Godswalk. Continents, regions, jungles, deserts, plains, mountains, etc.

I plan to keep up on your stuff, so whatever you write next I'll be there.

-Nasty-
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Numinous

#79
March 23, 2006, 06:48:20 PM
Ok, the troll/fey are called Thrin, and i'm not quite sure where to go with them as of yet.  The way things are set up right now, each Ancient created one race, like dragons, trolls, etc.  I plan to put trolls in as the hisorian/loremaster niche.  Perhaps the guardians of history or something.  Anyway, the Thrin are going to be a PC race version of trolls.  I'm leaning right now towards also making them a bit dwarven in their aspect, but making them less Xenophobic.  Perhaps the adventurers of their race are knowledge-seekers who want to bring home lore and gain prestige.  They also can tend to be reclusive, dwelling in rugged mountain ranges where they build massive collections of knowledge, in preparation for a day when they will become as strong as their somewhat brutish ancestors...

wow, honestly, that just came out as I wrote, i like it myself...

I really need help assigning species to the ancients though, help there would be appreciated.
Previously: Natural 20, Critical Threat, Rose of Montague
- Currently working on: The Smoking Hills - A bottom-up, seat-of-my-pants, fairy tale adventure!

Soup Nazi

#80
March 23, 2006, 07:02:28 PM
The Thrin as a race could be mostly content to keep to themselves, but they can't just hide in their swamps and let history pass them by now can they?

Enter the PC Thrin, who will be explorers and historians who travel the world and document the events, people, places, and cultures outside of Thrin-land. They return home with their findings, which are added to the great libraries of their people. Then they set off once again.

What do you think?

-Nasty-

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Numinous

#81
March 23, 2006, 07:11:21 PM
Umm... Besides the fact that I said they live in the mountains, it was very much like what I had envisioned.  I guess that means it's time to call Raelifin in here to update the racial stats.

Alright, so what I have for divine races, not yet matched to ancients are...

Not quite sure how this will work yet, but Each Ancient created a powerful species symbolising their ideals.  Each of these divine races will have a weaker counterpart which can be played as a PC.  I might want to change this later, but it will probably stay this way for a while anyway.

-Giants-->Half-giants
-Ogres-->Dwarven variant
-Dragons-->Kobolds
-Trolls-->Thrin
-Yuan-ti abominations-->Snake-assassins(stats coming soon)
-doppelgangers-->changelings
-Lycanthropes-->shifters
-Goblinoids-->goblins  (long story)
-Illithids-->complete psionic apparently has a solution here, i'll wait and see
-Help please?
Previously: Natural 20, Critical Threat, Rose of Montague
- Currently working on: The Smoking Hills - A bottom-up, seat-of-my-pants, fairy tale adventure!

Soup Nazi

#82
March 23, 2006, 07:16:04 PM
QuoteUmm... Besides the fact that I said they live in the mountains, it was very much like what I had envisioned. I guess that means it's time to call Raelifin in here to update the racial stats.
my bad. But you got the idea
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Numinous

#83
March 23, 2006, 07:18:37 PM
Indeed, so any ideas for divine races?  Maybe I should throw in a nice and shiny psionic race, but I currently don't own the XPH, any ideas?  It's for my psionic god...
Previously: Natural 20, Critical Threat, Rose of Montague
- Currently working on: The Smoking Hills - A bottom-up, seat-of-my-pants, fairy tale adventure!

brainface

#84
March 23, 2006, 08:03:20 PM
dude, use the srd, you don't need no xph.

http://www.d20srd.org/indexes/psionicRacesClassesSkillsSpells.htm

given, that won't have a lot of fluff, but surely you can write some?

QuoteRegarding penguins, associating them with passion is no less silly than Lovecraft choosing to prominently feature giant albino penguins in a horror story, something that he has indeed done.

dude, which one was that? i remember no giant white penguins :/
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Soup Nazi

#85
March 23, 2006, 08:37:06 PM
Quotedude, which one was that? i remember no giant white penguins :/
I am suddenly reminded of Billy Madison
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Numinous

#86
March 23, 2006, 08:41:39 PM
Yeah, that was where all the penguins that influence my life came from...  that movie should not be shown t children at an impressionable age...
Previously: Natural 20, Critical Threat, Rose of Montague
- Currently working on: The Smoking Hills - A bottom-up, seat-of-my-pants, fairy tale adventure!

Soup Nazi

#87
March 23, 2006, 09:17:23 PM
Hiya kids! Bet ya thought that I was dead! But I just fell down, and cracked my skull, and got a hemorrhage in my head!

EDIT: or impressionable adults for that matter...
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Numinous

#88
March 23, 2006, 09:21:41 PM
alright, solidifying the concepts of Tha Anciens and matching races up.  wow, I can multi-task.

Tisis- The Dragon-father and master of battle.  He created the Dragon, which then split into the various incarnations seen today.
Arithera- god of freedom and rebellion.  He created the Ogres, which in my CS are beings who value the indivual and the spirit over all.
Kathar(fire 3)Cleansing, force, purity, regeneration
Tabes(Earth 1)Decay, entropy, disease
Hutor(Earth 2)sun, positive energy, protection
Plavar- god of wealth and greed, creator of
Keia(Water 1)Magic, change
Moira(water 2)Time, fate,
Duprax-Goddess of the cursed and mistress of the maelstrom.  instead of making a race, she poisoned the creation of the others.  By making lycanthropy, she unleashed her fickle nature and terrible whimsy upon the world.
Epos(wind 1)Travel, roads, horizons
Onacium- Goddess of devious lies and deceptions.  Creator of the Yuan-ti, and patron of all their devious schemes
Gnent- god of lost knowledge and lore.  This od made the trolls to gather and watch over the world's istory.

Reminder for me:write fiction on the dragons color-split

Umm...  The gods are supposed to match with the races...  This could be a problem...
Previously: Natural 20, Critical Threat, Rose of Montague
- Currently working on: The Smoking Hills - A bottom-up, seat-of-my-pants, fairy tale adventure!

Raelifin

#89
March 23, 2006, 09:26:55 PM
This is what I came up with for the deity -> race connections based on the info you gave.

Tisis -> Dragons
Arithera -> Ogres
Kathar -> Pheonix
Tabes -> Goblins
Hutor -> ???
Plavar -> Gnomes?
Keia -> Dopplegangers
Moira -> ???
Duprax -> Lycans
Epos -> ???
Onacium -> Yuan-Ti
Gnent -> Trolls
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