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Epic Meepo

#30
September 26, 2007, 07:58:36 PM
:ninja: Like stealthy ninja, Epic Meepo sneaks into your setting and takes a quick peek around.

I love the various city maps. Even though they're hand drawn, they're of very good quality. But where are the world and regional maps? They should pop up like artwork right at the top of the Physical Geography section, but I didn't see them. And I know they exist (or did at one point) because Ishy talks about them in an old comment on this post.

You have a long list of affiliations and even a history of the Andal's migration. Both of those sections could benefit from the inclusion of maps. The main list of affiliations could divide the organizations up by region and have a map showing the relative locations of their bases of operation. And a simplistic map depicting the course of the Andal's migration would also be nice.

So, all in all, very good. As you can see, my only real complaint is that there should be more. More maps and more everything!

This has been an Epic Meepo stealthy ninja review. :ninja:

EDIT: With power of ninja, you can make first post on new page! :ninja:
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Moniker

#31
October 02, 2007, 04:53:40 PM
I appreciate the review, Meepo!

I'm working on getting more maps up on the website; I decided to consolidate some of the tabs (and eliminate the political/physical geography one).

The Cities and Settlements, as well as the Political Geography, should have maps attributed to those tabs now (with clickable locations). I am steadily trying to work in regional maps, but a lot (and I mean a LOT of them) are pencil sketches in a sketchbook that have been done ad hoc from the larger-scale world map.
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Moniker

#32
October 15, 2007, 02:12:17 PM
I am finally drawing a seven year storyarc to a close with the advent of 4th edition. As I intend to advance the storyline 21 years into the future of Aglador, here is what I am presenting as a general premise of the game. It provides an epilogue of the actions the player characters have taken over the years and presents the basis of the story for Year 200: Aglador.

There are a number of similar names which can sometimes be confusing to those who aren't actually playing in the campaign. If you can find any glaring issues with the following prologue, please let me know.

Thanks in advance!

Act I: The Rise of King Verminas Belgarion
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The stage upon which the war unfolds is a country known as [Aglador]. No stranger to strife amongst its kin, King [Aden Ladros] was branded a heretic by the Archbishop [Blicard] in 178 Third Age and died within the dungeons in the holy city of [Mithrin Roel]. Duke [Verminas Belgarion] ursurps the throne in Girithlin, the apparent victor of a political battle fought within the shadows. The death of [Ethan Dautinthorne], the crown prince of Aglador, soon came thereafter due to malady. Over a period of eleven years, the newly-crowned King Verminas instituted vast political reformation and eliminated Aglador's monetary reliance upon the [Southern Empire of Pharazon].

Aglador is thrown backward into a dark age.

In year 200, King [Verminas Belgarion] is suddenly stricken by malady (ironically, the same flux that had killed the crown prince) and dies in his ancestral home of [Caer Moray]. The question becomes who is to take the throne with no successor. Aurora Belgarion is the niece of Verminas, living as an adherent in Mahalma under the influence of the [Olornite] Father [Paramon]. Prior to admittance, she was adopted by King Verminas as his daughter. This would make her the heir apparent, and when she was of age she would marry a man of the King's choosing. However, the Queen Elaine Belgarion unexpectedly became pregnant with a second son in 200, giving birth to [Warren Belgarion]. The newborn infant would ascend the throne by proclaimation from the Queen. Too young to rule, the crown prince required a male regent who would be king in all but name. [Cassamir Dautinthorne], brother of the Queen, seemed the obvious choice for regency. However, fearing the influence such an appointment would give the Queen and the aristocracy, [Parliament] refused to back him. Instead, they recommend Duke Ethan Priam.


Act II: The Two Dukes
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Duke [Cassamir Dautinthorne] and Duke [Ethan Priam] are both distinguished; one the head of [Iron Throne] and master of [Belegost] and the other a folk hero and general of Rhovania's armies during the [Border War II]. Cassamir counts as ally to the greater part of the older aristocracy to the throne of Aglador, those that supported the rise of [Balbanese Dautinthorne] and his royal house during the [Kinstrife]. However, the disenfranchised and fallen nobility left in the aftermath of the second Border War look to [Ethan Priam], a symbol of unification and strength amongst [Dalefolk] and [Aradain] alike.

Eventually, Aurora Belgarion is taken from Mahalma to the holy city and then turned over by the [Knights of the Southern Cross] to Duke Cassamir in Belegost. Casssamir then declares her the heir apparent to the throne, undermining the wishes of the Queen Elaine. Although marriage is rumored with Aurora to Cassamir or his son [Balbanese Dautinthorne II], nothing has yet come to pass.

Although the lines have been drawn, it is not strictly between the [Aradain] and [Dalefolk]. The kidnapping of Aurora has precipitated the war with Duke Ethan, as he musters his soldiers along the edge of the [Western Myrkwood], rallying loyal barons on his side.


Major Houses

[House Dautinthorne]
Duke Cassamir Dautinthorne (Belegost)
Rose during the Kinstrife.
Ethos - careful and patient but cruel in execution

[House Belgarion]
Queen Elaine Belgarion and crown prince Warren Hamilton (Girithlin)
Duchess Aurora Belgarion (Caer Moray)
Dissadent house from the Kinstrife. Rose during the inquisition of Aden Ladros and Estel Dautinthorne.
Ethos - calculating yet practical

[House Priam]
Duke Ethan Priam (Hornburg)
Founded upon the unification of Rhovania beneath the [Valelaw]
Ethos - vigilant but vengeful
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Moniker

#33
October 16, 2007, 03:24:58 PM
New updates for the organization Iron Throne, the sword of Parliament in the country of Aglador: http://deismaar.pbwiki.com/The+Iron+Throne
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Moniker

#34
October 31, 2007, 11:28:20 AM
Map of the western hemisphere completed with cities on a hex grid

[spoiler]http://ogy.cc/wh_nas.jpg [/spoiler]
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Moniker

#35
October 02, 2008, 11:54:59 AM
Big updates!

The campaign in the city of Kahabro is going extremely well. I've updates a number of factions and districts within the city, and included the true history of it's founding beneath the Gothric princes on the front page of the wiki.

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LordVreeg

#36
October 02, 2008, 02:57:53 PM
I always enjoy your stuff.

Kahabro is interesting, and you are showing more and more of your own personality in this city, and less and less the influence of certain authors.
I love the Factions and organizations, especially the nine men.

750 noble families?  That is a lot..and I like how you go into the breakdown, but you need to tell me what makes then noble versus rich.

I enjoyed the breakdown on the Fifth House.  That helped me get an idea of the type of rule.

I think I am not going to update to 2.0 PBwiki for Celtricia...I don't like how segmented it looks.

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Moniker

#37
October 02, 2008, 05:17:43 PM
Noble Families
The 750 noble families have specific influence with the 21 Merchant-Princes which rule the city. Those who qualify as nobles within the city either have a stake in the heavy grain trade industry or within its banking system for lending towards the economy of the city and its goverment. Although there are many houses which lay claim to the aristocracy, only twenty-one specific houses truly have influence within the governance of the city itself.

The noble houses exist as an extension of local politics and the interaction between the artisan's guilds. Truly, they might as well be one in the same, as that many of the alderman of the guilds themselves come from highborn families.

Factions
The faction that the players work for is the Kargat http://deismaar.pbwiki.com/Kargat, which is "lead" by the Founder http://deismaar.pbwiki.com/The+Founder to kill the Nine Men.

The basis of the story is that they're all indentured to the Founder's whim and will as measure to exhonerate themselves from terrible crimes they've committed. No one really knows what the Founder is, or who he's working for, but they carry out his wishes in the shadows. The relationship between the Kargat and the Legate http://deismaar.pbwiki.com/Legate.

The Foundry, which is where the Kargat operate out of, is also where the secret alchemical processes to develop Walstanian Pyreshot is kept. It's well-guarded, as it is the reason the Legate and the Merchant-Princes have held onto the city for so long without the intervention of the Fifth House theocracy. It more or less serves as a city-state unto itself.

PB 2.0
I haven't really settled on whether I like it yet or not. The sidebar is cleaner and it carries over the right fonttypes much easier, but is kind of a pita to manage since I am used to upmarking in wiki format, as opposed to using the selectable buttons to denote headers, italics and the like.
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Steerpike

#38
December 10, 2008, 05:12:05 PM
Just started reading your setting and I'm enjoying it so far, especially the detailed city layout.

One thing that struck me that has somewhat been noted already above are the names.  I'm not sure if you're naming things after people/places in other settings intentionally, but the name Belgarion is shared by the protagonist of David Eddings' Belgariad/Mallorean, while Baelish is the surname of Littlefinger in A Song of Ice and Fire... you might want to change those names or tweak them, because to those who've read a fair bit of fantasy they'll stand out pretty strongly.
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