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(Pregame Setup) The Age of Soot - Chapter One: Into The Smoke

Started by Senkennomei, March 03, 2006, 05:26:47 PM

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Senkennomei

#45
March 14, 2006, 03:40:17 PM
Looks good, but I would like to ask you to use a DM-friendly character sheet. If you do not have one, use this:

Name

Gender:
Race:
Class:
Alignment:
Deity:
Age:
Height:
Weight:

Attributes
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HD
Exp:

HP:
Code Select

[B]Str:[/B]
[B]Dex:[/B]
[B]Con:[/B]
[B]Int:[/B]
[B]Wis:[/B]
[B]Cha:[/B]

Speed:

AC:
Touch:   Flat-Footed:

Initiative:

BAB:
Code Select

[B]Fort:[/B]
[B]Ref:[/B]
[B]Will:[/B]

Grapple Bonus:

Racial Traits
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Class Features
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Feats:

Skills:
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Total Skill Points:
Code Select

Appraise (Int)
Balance (Dex)
Bluff (Cha)
Climb (Str)
Concentration (Con)
Diplomacy (Cha)
Disguise (Cha)
Escape Artist (Dex)
Forgery (Int)
Gather Information (Cha)
Heal (Wis)
Hide (Dex)
Intimidate (Cha)
Jump (Str)
Listen (Wis)
Move Silently (Dex)
Ride (Dex)
Search (Int)
Sense Motive (Wis)
Spot (Wis)
Survival (Wis)
Swim (Str)
Use Rope (Dex)
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Languages:

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Equipment
[spoiler]
Code Select

Equipment Name (Cost)(Weight) (Location)
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Background
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Appearance
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Personality
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"If anything in this life is certain, if history has taught us anything, it is that you can kill anyone." - Michael Corleone
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Wix of Bel-Air

#46
March 15, 2006, 03:26:27 PM
Done and Done! "amazed.png"Ã, (do you want me to leave the DMGII version there too?)
Eats brains here! Ugh!
That is not dead which can eternal lie,
And with strange aeons even death may die.
[spoiler=Cthulhu]"To obtain a deep, restful, and fulfilling sleep, you must first submerge yourself in your cyclopean city of hideous non-Euclidean geometries beneath the sea, and then let your body die. But don't worry! As long as you continue to emanate enough evil thought-energy to influence and control your many worshippers throughout the untold eons, they will resurrect you when the time comes. I guarantee it!" [/spoiler]
[spoiler=Wash]
Yes. Yes, this is a fertile land, and we will thrive."

(as Stegosaurus) "We will rule over all this land, and we will call it... 'This Land'."

(as T-Rex) "I think we should call it...your grave!"

(Stegosaurus) "Ah, curse your sudden but inevitable betrayal!"

(T-Rex) "Ha ha HA! Mine is an evil laugh...now die!"
[/spoiler]
[spoiler=Stanza 11]
No! penury, inertness and grimace,
In some strange sort, were the land's portion. "See
Or shut your eyes," said Nature peevishly,
"It nothing skills: I cannot help my case:
'Tis the Last Judgment's fire must cure this place,
Calcine its clods and set my prisoners free."
[/spoiler]

Numinous

#47
March 15, 2006, 06:31:08 PM
alright, my gnoll is finished over at WoTC
Previously: Natural 20, Critical Threat, Rose of Montague
- Currently working on: The Smoking Hills - A bottom-up, seat-of-my-pants, fairy tale adventure!

Wix of Bel-Air

#48
March 15, 2006, 11:50:26 PM
BTW, who are your top pick for characters, Senkennomei?
Eats brains here! Ugh!
That is not dead which can eternal lie,
And with strange aeons even death may die.
[spoiler=Cthulhu]"To obtain a deep, restful, and fulfilling sleep, you must first submerge yourself in your cyclopean city of hideous non-Euclidean geometries beneath the sea, and then let your body die. But don't worry! As long as you continue to emanate enough evil thought-energy to influence and control your many worshippers throughout the untold eons, they will resurrect you when the time comes. I guarantee it!" [/spoiler]
[spoiler=Wash]
Yes. Yes, this is a fertile land, and we will thrive."

(as Stegosaurus) "We will rule over all this land, and we will call it... 'This Land'."

(as T-Rex) "I think we should call it...your grave!"

(Stegosaurus) "Ah, curse your sudden but inevitable betrayal!"

(T-Rex) "Ha ha HA! Mine is an evil laugh...now die!"
[/spoiler]
[spoiler=Stanza 11]
No! penury, inertness and grimace,
In some strange sort, were the land's portion. "See
Or shut your eyes," said Nature peevishly,
"It nothing skills: I cannot help my case:
'Tis the Last Judgment's fire must cure this place,
Calcine its clods and set my prisoners free."
[/spoiler]

Senkennomei

#49
March 17, 2006, 08:13:54 AM
...I have the right to remain silent. Anything I say can and will be used against me. I have the right to an attourney. If I can not afford one, one will be provided for me in a court of law. I have the right to...

Actually, if I remember correctly I like your's. I haven't gotten around to reading all of them yet, I'll give you some constructive criticism later today. As for now: off to my math quiz
"If anything in this life is certain, if history has taught us anything, it is that you can kill anyone." - Michael Corleone
My Gallery

Wix of Bel-Air

#50
March 17, 2006, 02:25:28 PM
OKEY! I'll wait then... don't forget to look over Natural 20's.

 :ball:
Eats brains here! Ugh!
That is not dead which can eternal lie,
And with strange aeons even death may die.
[spoiler=Cthulhu]"To obtain a deep, restful, and fulfilling sleep, you must first submerge yourself in your cyclopean city of hideous non-Euclidean geometries beneath the sea, and then let your body die. But don't worry! As long as you continue to emanate enough evil thought-energy to influence and control your many worshippers throughout the untold eons, they will resurrect you when the time comes. I guarantee it!" [/spoiler]
[spoiler=Wash]
Yes. Yes, this is a fertile land, and we will thrive."

(as Stegosaurus) "We will rule over all this land, and we will call it... 'This Land'."

(as T-Rex) "I think we should call it...your grave!"

(Stegosaurus) "Ah, curse your sudden but inevitable betrayal!"

(T-Rex) "Ha ha HA! Mine is an evil laugh...now die!"
[/spoiler]
[spoiler=Stanza 11]
No! penury, inertness and grimace,
In some strange sort, were the land's portion. "See
Or shut your eyes," said Nature peevishly,
"It nothing skills: I cannot help my case:
'Tis the Last Judgment's fire must cure this place,
Calcine its clods and set my prisoners free."
[/spoiler]

Senkennomei

#51
March 17, 2006, 04:35:45 PM
Okay, I've looked over it and there are a few problems:
1) It's not in a DM-friendly format
2) Your background is only one paragraph long
3) Your appearance is only one paragraph long
4) You don't even HAVE a Personality listed

As for Natural 20...well...
"If anything in this life is certain, if history has taught us anything, it is that you can kill anyone." - Michael Corleone
My Gallery

Numinous

#52
March 17, 2006, 04:49:14 PM
well what?  No offense, but if it needs work, i would sure like to know so i can make it better.  I'm a bit apprehensive about messing with your CS, but I felt i gave you a good idea of what m character is about.  You can mess with my background and throw plothooks at me if you wish, and i'll go with them to the best of my ability.

Either way, jut tell what i need to do to make it better...
Previously: Natural 20, Critical Threat, Rose of Montague
- Currently working on: The Smoking Hills - A bottom-up, seat-of-my-pants, fairy tale adventure!

Wix of Bel-Air

#53
March 17, 2006, 05:02:01 PM
EDIT: Okay! I'll add some stuff.
Eats brains here! Ugh!
That is not dead which can eternal lie,
And with strange aeons even death may die.
[spoiler=Cthulhu]"To obtain a deep, restful, and fulfilling sleep, you must first submerge yourself in your cyclopean city of hideous non-Euclidean geometries beneath the sea, and then let your body die. But don't worry! As long as you continue to emanate enough evil thought-energy to influence and control your many worshippers throughout the untold eons, they will resurrect you when the time comes. I guarantee it!" [/spoiler]
[spoiler=Wash]
Yes. Yes, this is a fertile land, and we will thrive."

(as Stegosaurus) "We will rule over all this land, and we will call it... 'This Land'."

(as T-Rex) "I think we should call it...your grave!"

(Stegosaurus) "Ah, curse your sudden but inevitable betrayal!"

(T-Rex) "Ha ha HA! Mine is an evil laugh...now die!"
[/spoiler]
[spoiler=Stanza 11]
No! penury, inertness and grimace,
In some strange sort, were the land's portion. "See
Or shut your eyes," said Nature peevishly,
"It nothing skills: I cannot help my case:
'Tis the Last Judgment's fire must cure this place,
Calcine its clods and set my prisoners free."
[/spoiler]

Raelifin

#54
March 17, 2006, 05:03:56 PM
Yeah, I think that comment wasn't very constructive.    :knock:

P.S. I love that emoticon. ^_^

Wix of Bel-Air

#55
March 17, 2006, 05:21:53 PM
FYI, I might be making up some cities if I can't find any examples and also... my character sheet is in the format you gave me and I can make it no cooler than it is now.

Ciao!  

P.S. It's on the 2nd page in the middle. Jurukin is his name, Wixman is mine.
Eats brains here! Ugh!
That is not dead which can eternal lie,
And with strange aeons even death may die.
[spoiler=Cthulhu]"To obtain a deep, restful, and fulfilling sleep, you must first submerge yourself in your cyclopean city of hideous non-Euclidean geometries beneath the sea, and then let your body die. But don't worry! As long as you continue to emanate enough evil thought-energy to influence and control your many worshippers throughout the untold eons, they will resurrect you when the time comes. I guarantee it!" [/spoiler]
[spoiler=Wash]
Yes. Yes, this is a fertile land, and we will thrive."

(as Stegosaurus) "We will rule over all this land, and we will call it... 'This Land'."

(as T-Rex) "I think we should call it...your grave!"

(Stegosaurus) "Ah, curse your sudden but inevitable betrayal!"

(T-Rex) "Ha ha HA! Mine is an evil laugh...now die!"
[/spoiler]
[spoiler=Stanza 11]
No! penury, inertness and grimace,
In some strange sort, were the land's portion. "See
Or shut your eyes," said Nature peevishly,
"It nothing skills: I cannot help my case:
'Tis the Last Judgment's fire must cure this place,
Calcine its clods and set my prisoners free."
[/spoiler]

Senkennomei

#56
March 17, 2006, 05:46:41 PM
Quote from: Natural 20well what?  No offense, but if it needs work, i would sure like to know so i can make it better.  I'm a bit apprehensive about messing with your CS, but I felt i gave you a good idea of what m character is about.  You can mess with my background and throw plothooks at me if you wish, and i'll go with them to the best of my ability.

Either way, jut tell what i need to do to make it better...

Hey, hey, lay off. I was reading your submission again.

Well, your background is sparse. Be creative :-) I only work with what I'm given for character-specific plot hooks.

Also, your character's appearance is still highly questionable. It's lacking detail, and consists of only three sentences, one of which is a fragment.

Finally, you need to explain why your character is Chaotic Neutral.

That aside, there's not much that really makes me go "wow." Your character is essentially a typical gnoll...

You might want to put those Codes to use. I put them in so you could indent them with Microsoft Word and make tables.
"If anything in this life is certain, if history has taught us anything, it is that you can kill anyone." - Michael Corleone
My Gallery

Numinous

#57
March 17, 2006, 07:27:18 PM
I'm going to hide in the corner again, bye now...
Previously: Natural 20, Critical Threat, Rose of Montague
- Currently working on: The Smoking Hills - A bottom-up, seat-of-my-pants, fairy tale adventure!

Wix of Bel-Air

#58
March 17, 2006, 11:25:51 PM
Great! Look what you did now Senkon...   :hammer:
Eats brains here! Ugh!
That is not dead which can eternal lie,
And with strange aeons even death may die.
[spoiler=Cthulhu]"To obtain a deep, restful, and fulfilling sleep, you must first submerge yourself in your cyclopean city of hideous non-Euclidean geometries beneath the sea, and then let your body die. But don't worry! As long as you continue to emanate enough evil thought-energy to influence and control your many worshippers throughout the untold eons, they will resurrect you when the time comes. I guarantee it!" [/spoiler]
[spoiler=Wash]
Yes. Yes, this is a fertile land, and we will thrive."

(as Stegosaurus) "We will rule over all this land, and we will call it... 'This Land'."

(as T-Rex) "I think we should call it...your grave!"

(Stegosaurus) "Ah, curse your sudden but inevitable betrayal!"

(T-Rex) "Ha ha HA! Mine is an evil laugh...now die!"
[/spoiler]
[spoiler=Stanza 11]
No! penury, inertness and grimace,
In some strange sort, were the land's portion. "See
Or shut your eyes," said Nature peevishly,
"It nothing skills: I cannot help my case:
'Tis the Last Judgment's fire must cure this place,
Calcine its clods and set my prisoners free."
[/spoiler]
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