The d20 Mana System is Complete: Inquire Within

[Xeviat]

This thread exists to contain all questions, comments, criticism, praise, or anything else related to my alternate Spellcasting system I have posted/published in "the Post".

d20 Mana System: Vanician Casting has Failed its Last Save

Please ask any questions you may have, say anything that comes to mind.

The full system can also be found here:

OGL Mana System

[Túrin]

Can you feel the building anticipation?

[Xeviat]

I'm trying to put a big file in the Host, but for some reason it wouldn't work. I'm trying again.

[Túrin]

It seems you posted your mana system in the Post. Good. I like it, and it seems better and more consistent than UA's spell points. A few remarks:

- There seems to be an inconsistency between the text and the first table. According to the text, the number of bonus spell points is equal to twice the key ability ability modifier times half the character's caster level, while the table consistently lists only half that amount. Assuming your work is based on the XPH, it seems the word "twice" in the text should be removed.

- The references at the end of the text are rather vague. The new spell "X" does not appear to exist; the first url instead leads us to a document full of notes on how spells were changed.

- The spell page in the Hosting area looks rather chaotic. I suggest you remove all the extra spaces and use bold and/or italics fonts to make it more readable. Some sort of index might help as well.

- As I skimmed through the spell list, I noticed you changed the cure spell to use d6s rather than d8s. How come? Did you make any other such changes to spells (except the inflict spell, obviously)? I also noted the cure spell is listed with Saving Throw: None which seems wrong to me. Isn't that supposed to be Saving Throw: Will half (harmless)?

Congratulations on finishing this huge project!
Túrin

PS You should edit the OP to state that the project is now up in the Post, and to provide a clickable link both to that page and to the referenced pages in the aritcle itself that have (unclickable) links.

[brainface]

- The spell page in the Hosting area looks rather chaotic. I suggest you remove all the extra spaces and use bold and/or italics fonts to make it more readable. Some sort of index might help as well.

What happened to your nice htmly spell listing? with the links up top, etc.?

[Xeviat]

The files it links to were made half-hazardly, because the one was very big. I should have the true web pages up shortly; but since the spell description page did come out so poorly, I'll update that to a more cleaned up document tonight.

[Túrin]

*points at various other comments* How about those other things I said?

On a more general note, are you aware you have a dead link in your sig?
Túrin

[brainface]

[nit]
Is it really necessary to refer to yourself as "the writer" when writing a dnd article? I'm pretty sure you can just say "I" when not writing for Nature. (enworld aside.) :)
[/picked]

That said, it looks pretty cool so far
(and now really is visible to everyone, fyi.)

[CYMRO]

[nit]
Is it really necessary to refer to yourself as "the writer" when writing a dnd article? I'm pretty sure you can just say "I" when not writing for Nature. (enworld aside.) :)
[/picked]

I read that and thought another person was writing the opening blurb...

[Xeviat]

- The references at the end of the text are rather vague. The new spell "X" does not appear to exist; the first url instead leads us to a document full of notes on how spells were changed.

- As I skimmed through the spell list, I noticed you changed the cure spell to use d6s rather than d8s. How come? Did you make any other such changes to spells (except the inflict spell, obviously)? I also noted the cure spell is listed with Saving Throw: None which seems wrong to me. Isn't that supposed to be Saving Throw: Will half (harmless)?[/quote]Congratulations on finishing this huge project!
Túrin

PS You should edit the OP to state that the project is now up in the Post, and to provide a clickable link both to that page and to the referenced pages in the aritcle itself that have (unclickable) links.
[/quote]

I will ... when I get home. LOL.

And thanks; I can now focus on my costuming and writing the super dungeon for my PbP playtest.

[Xeviat]

I am in the process of posting the whole system in my section on our hosting page. Expect it by the end of the day.

[Xeviat]

It is up everyone. Please, read, share your opinions. It's all for you.

http://www.thecbg.org/settings/29/Mana_System.html

[brainface]

You need to learn a scripting language and regular expressions, so you can use it to quickly and easily hyperlink everything in those files :D.

I keep trying to click on the spell names, and nothing happens. :(

[Ishmayl-Retired]

Xeviat, what strikes me the most is the fact that you have apparently put an extraordinary amount of work into this.  It was a huge project, and you've definitely got more willpower than I in finishing something of this caliber.  I have to be honest, I'm not a rules' lawyer, nor am I even remotely an expert on various systems in d20, so I doubt I can add much legitimate discussion to this, but for what it's worth, I read the entire system (minus reading every single spell, I skimmed most of them)  and am thoroughly impressed.  When I get the links section updated, it will definitely have a home there.

[Xeviat]

I'm spreading the word over on the House Rules board on Wizards.COMmunity; perhaps that will draw us some new blood.

And thanks Ishy; I hope it is worth all the time I put into it.