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Sulos, a world still under construction

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Soup Nazi

#30
March 12, 2006, 06:10:44 AM
Quotei read the Academy, and I can tell you the reaction you have ben getting is probably silent approval. There deosn't seem to be much left to change there, or much to add without putting too much in.
Well that's good.

QuoteI also read Kashra, and I can say that it does look good. you might want to look into how a group of such peaceful people could be motivated to essentially perform acts of genocide against the bugbears present in the region.
Genocide? The bugbears live in Hazra'Ghalduur now; they're not wiped out. They were simply displaced from their homeland.

A)The humans were forced from their homes into lands already owned by bugbears.
B)Humans and bugbears fight over the territory.
C)The bugbears kill the human leader, but lose the war.  
D)The surviving bugbears rebuild in Hazra'Ghalduur

It's sust two species fighting for the right to live their own lives, in a nation they can call home. There's certainly enmity, but no designs on extermination.

I'm glad you liked it though.

Quotei just looked over al'Arach, and it seems to be great, but also missing something. Perhaps if you described important people in their organisation, or went into whether they actually can read minds and are loyal elsewhere.(spoiler blocks, mind you) then you might have something else to write about.
Sometimes isn't it just better to leave a few things unanswered? There isn't much of a mystery if the whole thing is right in front of you. I want to create a setting that inspires stories; why spell out everything now? If I do that, I've written a novel, not a campaign world.

As for the important people thing...yep I will need those. But I'll need them everywhere. Before I populate Sulos with NPCs, I want to have the big picture in front of me. Sure I could make the vampiric lords of Sylescnia next, but I've got so many other questions to answer first. Each little section has ties to the others, how can I make the vampiric lords when I don't know anything about the priesthood which is converting their people?

Spoiler blocks are all well and good, but trying to hide something from a player, is quite a bit more difficult than leaving a speculative unanswered scenario, that the DM is left to extrapolate for himself. It's gets people thinking. I prefer to leave myself, or any other DM who uses this stuff, the options to fill in the blanks themselves. <Empowering DMs=Good>

There's a difference between vague and lifeless, and intentionally unfinshed. At no point should you come out of any of these spoiler sections, without asking yourself "what's missing"? Notice how the intro descriptions for each nation begin with a question? The answer isn't in the spoiler...it's in the adventure.  

That said, I'm glad you've taken the time to go through this piece by piece. You've certainly given me many things to think about. I appreciate all your suggestions, even those I don't completely agree with. Feedback of any kind is of course helpful, because even if I don't like the specifics, it may inspire me in other ways. Thanks man...
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Numinous

#31
March 12, 2006, 01:20:08 PM
No problem.  Sorry I missed the hobgoblin thing, bt the way it was worded inclined me to believe what I said.  I also didn't read too much of Hazra'Ghalduur, so that could provide a reason as well.  Don't worry about the detailing either, I was kinda scrambing for a way to make my criticism constructive.

anyway, you have given m several interesting concepts to throw into my world, so I suppose it's an even trade-off.
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Soup Nazi

#32
March 12, 2006, 01:38:07 PM
Excellent. Glad to have been of service.
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Epic Meepo

#33
March 17, 2006, 12:19:33 AM
So, this is the infamous CBG Sulos thread.  Do you prefer to see comments here on this board or back on the WotC boards?
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March 17, 2006, 12:34:49 AM
It makes no difference to me. Wherever you feel more comfortable.
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