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Started by Xathan, December 07, 2006, 10:34:32 AM

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Xathan

What are everyone's thoughts on this? I'm personally reserving judgement on it's overall writing, since it's still developing, but so far it has got a few chuckles here and there from me, and the artwork is fun, not as goodfy as OOTS but not quite as 'serious' as normal manga style art.
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Raelifin

Aside from having to read it twice to understand it... I think it's great. To me, there are three signs that I really like something:
1) I enjoy it in the moment. Erfworld made me laugh.
2) I think about it afterwords. Of course, only thinking about the briliance of using the word "croak" isn't much, but it's something.
3) I quote it endlessly as an eternal in-joke.

So, I haven't reached stage three, but it promises good things. I'll certainly read it for a while.

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It is entertaining, and I like the art-style, so I'll watch and wait before I praise it.
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So far, my thoughts are...

"Meh,"  "Hmmm..."  "We'll See..."

in that order.
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Quote from: IshmaylSo far, my thoughts are...

"Meh,"  "Hmmm..."  "We'll See..."

in that order.

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I have to agree with Ishy.  Thus far, I haven't found it that great; certainly not OotS-caliber.
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Rich did say it isn't OOTS style "one-punchline per page".  I think it has potential, though, because of Wanda's cast page quote, and because the titans that created the world are elvises (or elvis impersonators).
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Yes, the elvi (the obvious plural of elvus... and yes, I am aware of my spelling) were a nice touch.
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Raelifin

I think you're all just sour because it's not D&D centric and it lacks a background. Once it moves into the realm of being able to reference itself, you'll all regret your skepticism. So says me. Greensight ftw.

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Quote from: RaelifinI think you're all just sour because it's not D&D centric and it lacks a background. Once it moves into the realm of being able to reference itself, you'll all regret your skepticism. So says me. Greensight ftw.
like[/i] - many comics that are not in any way, shape, or form related to D&D, I fail to see the legitimacy of this statement. :)
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Ditto, seeing as I write a comic that is not strictly DnD centric. ;)
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What?
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Raelifin

My point was not that you can't enjoy a non-D&D comic as much as the concept that a plot-oriented comic needs time for build-up. Most comics, even plot comics choose to start with punchlines and non-sequitors, for much the same reason that overarching TV shows start with self-contained episodes: there is no knowledge base to draw on.

I'm not sure how smart it was to open with an exposition, but what I've seen so far has been quality, even if it is a bit like the beginning of a book, rather than a comic.

If, for example, the comic had spoofed on D&D (or some other topic), it would have an instant backdrop to play off of. Erfworld lacks this, and thus will be a bit confusing until character empathy grows.

And before you start pointing to comics like Inverloch or Earthsong, with strong openings, remember that they are drama/action based comics rather that humor based ones. Action based comics need no base understanding, they live for the "cool" factor. Drama based mediums need a slow build-up for proper empathy, so a slow start is a successful one.

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