Creation Story

[Porklet]

I decided that since my attention span is far to short to write a creation myth in prose.  So, I decided to express it in the form of Haiku's.  3 Parts, of 5, 7,and 5 Chapters made up of 5, 7, and 5 Haiku.  Sort of a Haikubed, if you will.  I finished the first Part, and I decided that I didn't have another 204 Haiku's in me.  Haiku-rumba, that's a lot of verses.  Tense varies wildly, it's meant to be enigmatic, and don't throw tomatoes you'll only get your monitor wet.

It had to be attached as a .pdf, because it is in 3-column form.  Sorry about that.  The .pdf is below.

EDIT:  I have decided to use the word decided less when I post...starting tomorrow.

[Humabout]

That is impressive.
You are an inspiration.
Keep up the great work.

[Seraph]

It is certainly evocative and mysterious.  I think it gets across what you intended it to.  Good job.

I like the extended Haiku motif, if for no other reason than its novelty.  It stands out.

[Humabout]

What I like the most is that it reads like scripture.  It feels like it could be a religious text somewhere.  I really wish I could create something like this for some of my games, but I never have the inspiration or the time or the talent.  Your players are in for a treat.

[Porklet]

What I like the most is that it reads like scripture.  It feels like it could be a religious text somewhere.  I really wish I could create something like this for some of my games, but I never have the inspiration or the time or the talent.  Your players are in for a treat.

Thanks for your kind words.  It wasn't intended to sound like scripture, but that is a happy accident.  I was using the shortened format of the Haiku to keep me focused and avoid digression.  I could go on and on with the story, and that was what I was trying to avoid.  Thanks again.

[Porklet]

It is certainly evocative and mysterious.  I think it gets across what you intended it to.  Good job.

I like the extended Haiku motif, if for no other reason than its novelty.  It stands out.

Thank you.

It works for the creation myth.  I was trying to pose as many questions as answers to the reader.  It gets across the general theme and only touches on detail.  I could also get away with enigmatic records for the myth since it predated written human history.

I had to abandon the Haiku for the second part.  Partially because I was Haiku'd out, and the second part deals entirely with the history of humanity.  That subject requires more detail.  I am thinking of making the second part "50 Events in Human History that Shaped the World."  It would allow me to expound on a subject, introduce related events that followed, and still allow me the freedom to jump from topic to topic.  I get bored so easily.