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Started by Numinous, March 05, 2006, 11:26:54 AM

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Numinous

Quote from: RaelifinThis is what I came up with for the deity -> race connections based on the info you gave.

Tisis -> Dragons
Arithera -> Ogres
Kathar -> Pheonix
Tabes -> Goblins
Hutor -> ???
Plavar -> Gnomes?
Keia -> Dopplegangers
Moira -> ???
Duprax -> Lycanthropes
Epos -> ???
Onacium -> Yuan-Ti
Gnent -> Trolls

alright, thanks for the help, here's the next draft


Tisis -> Dragons
Arithera -> Ogres
Kathar -> Pheonix
Tabes -> Goblins
Hutor -> giants
Plavar -> Gnomes?
Keia -> Dopplegangers
Moira -> Illithids
Duprax -> Lycans
Epos -> some sort of traveler race
Onacium -> Yuan-Ti
Gnent -> Trolls

alright, now on to defining the concepts of the gods better and finding some homebrew goodness!
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Soup Nazi

Epos -> some sort of traveler race (like a nomadic tribal people?)
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Numinous

not sure yet, maybe something that can fly?  It's based on the god of horizons, so you never know.  

On second thought, yeah, probably some type of nomadic culture.
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- Currently working on: The Smoking Hills - A bottom-up, seat-of-my-pants, fairy tale adventure!

Soup Nazi

Thri-Kreen Psions (nomads) and rangers spring to mind, as does the horizon walker PrC.
The spoon is mightier than the sword


Numinous

Currently, Several homebrew races are being made.  I'll give you some short blurbs, and what I could use some help with.

-Gnomes, if nothing else, are getting a revamp towards the mercantile.  Currently, I am looking for another idea for a monster that accurately an represent the spirit of commerce.

-A race that is descended from the phoenix itself.  Perhaps some divine and fiery abilities.  Any ideas on how to further define them?

-Apparently, Complete Psionic contains some sort of PC illithid race, if that comes out alright, then I will use it.  If not, looks like another homebrew...

-I'm curently trying to work out a mobile aristocracy for the nomadic race.  I also need a sort of monster to base it upon...  what are the air genies?  Are those just djinni, because that could be an idea...

-The Yuan-Ti created a new species as a tool to help them i their devious plots.  However, the "tools" didn't take too kindly to being used as disposable assassins, so they rebelled and now roam the world.

-Finally, we get to the Thrin, another race that has bad blood between it's progenitors.  The Thrin are a mountainous Fey that gather information in massive underground vaults located in the far mountains.  Adventurous Thrin venture forth from the caves to gather new knowledge and experience history firsthand, so that it can be catalogued in the great libraries of their homelands...

Previously: Natural 20, Critical Threat, Rose of Montague
- Currently working on: The Smoking Hills - A bottom-up, seat-of-my-pants, fairy tale adventure!

Soup Nazi

Quote-A race that is descended from the phoenix itself. Perhaps some divine and fiery abilities. Any ideas on how to further define them?
The Elan spring to mind as creatures reborn from mortal men, with fiery red hair and eyes...maybe not so divine, but they just popped into my head when I read this.

-Nasty-
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Numinous

I thought the Maenads were the fiery ones?
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- Currently working on: The Smoking Hills - A bottom-up, seat-of-my-pants, fairy tale adventure!

brainface

QuoteCurrently, I am looking for another idea for a monster that accurately an represent the spirit of commerce.
eh, there's these guys:
http://www.d20srd.org/srd/epic/monsters/mercane.htm
"The perfect is the enemy of the good." - Voltaire

Numinous

maybe...  I thought of them already though...  Maybe some monster that is the epitomy of greed?
Previously: Natural 20, Critical Threat, Rose of Montague
- Currently working on: The Smoking Hills - A bottom-up, seat-of-my-pants, fairy tale adventure!

brainface

hmm, when you ask for monsters, are you wanting the fluff preprovided? cuz that could make a lot of difference in what i would suggest--i've been assuming you would rework a group of stats to have whatever story you wanted.

http://www.planewalker.com/downloads/products/released.php
chapter 4 has the khaasta. reptilian merchant race. pretty greedy. (fiend folio also has them, i think?) another greedy race could be another type of geniee (efreet, dao, madrid), or maybe one of the demons, you could strip of some of the demonicness and emphasize the greedy part.

that pdf also has a slightly beefed up genasi (frcs genasi are just awful, i could rant for hours), some other races.
"The perfect is the enemy of the good." - Voltaire

Numinous

hm...  The greedy lizards sounds fun...  I guess I was hoping for something stronger than CR 5 to be honest...  The Mercanes just feel really weak when compared to Draons and trolls, y'know?
Previously: Natural 20, Critical Threat, Rose of Montague
- Currently working on: The Smoking Hills - A bottom-up, seat-of-my-pants, fairy tale adventure!

brainface

dude, trolls are CR 5 :D

You could just have every mercan/khaasta/whatnot encountered have 3/4 class levels. (thought tha'd req. more stating).

I'm not sure if there's gonna be many high CR creatures based entirely around merchantry. if i were you, i'd consider stealing the fluff from one creature and putting it with another creature's stats. ;)
"The perfect is the enemy of the good." - Voltaire

Numinous

May I point out that I've been haunting these forums so much that I may have put less than the required effort into memorizing my MM?  Looks like mercanes it is...  Very greedy mercanes...
Previously: Natural 20, Critical Threat, Rose of Montague
- Currently working on: The Smoking Hills - A bottom-up, seat-of-my-pants, fairy tale adventure!

Raelifin

â,¬Â¢  +2 Dexterity, -2 Strength.
    â,¬Â¢ Small Sized
    â,¬Â¢ __________ base land speed is 30 feet.
    â,¬Â¢ +2 racial bonus on Bluff and Sense Motive
    â,¬Â¢ Cold Weakness (Ex): Whenever ______ take cold damage they must make a fortitude saving throw, DC = damage dealt, or become fatigued.
    â,¬Â¢ Poison (Ex): ________ have poisonous fangs that they can use to bite with. When making an unarmed attack they may chose to attack with their mouth dealing 1d2 damage + poison. This poison is injury delivered and has an initial and secondary damage of 1d3 str. Optionally, a ________ may milk their fangs producing enough poison for one dose. _____ may milk themselves once per hour and the poison stays potent for twelve. _______ are immune to their own poison (including that of other ______). The DC for the poison is equal to 10 + half the ________â,¬,,¢s HD + their con modifier.
    â,¬Â¢ Favored Class: Rogue.

Numinous

Thanks Raelifin, I wait anxiously until our next greatly productive meeting.

EDIT: In case anyone is wondering, the stats Raelifin posted are for the yuan-ti PC race.
Previously: Natural 20, Critical Threat, Rose of Montague
- Currently working on: The Smoking Hills - A bottom-up, seat-of-my-pants, fairy tale adventure!