The Campaign Builder's Guild

I didn't notice Miss Star-Moon before. The names sounds like a Saturday morning cartoon for little girls (sorry, but that really is the first thing that comes to mind). Since she's a faerie queen, maybe that's the idea, but...Maybe you could call her Queen Starmoon. Actually, Queen Moonstar doesn't sound half bad. Moon Starqueen might even...no, maybe not.

Don't get me wrong, the character herself is interesting. Just the name makes me laugh.

She was supposed to sound whimsical. I may have overdone it. :P

Chromatic Oligarchy
Great name and a great flag. The history is written clearly and concisely, so there's only a little to add in that regard. I'd like to see the link to Maylin filled out, since that sounds interesting.

The one thing you might make a little more clear on this page is how much the gods were involved and how they got so involved.

QuoteMore and more gods, many of them minor members of the Choir of Ten Thousand seeking only self-promotion, started meddling in its affairs.

This came as a slight shock, since no earlier mention of made of their interference.

The second minor add would be a sentence or two explaining how it was founded (you say it when, and that it arose after the Horde, but I'd be curious to see a little more detail on how).

Crystalline Revolution
I think your meta note on the change in attitude is such a salient point here you might want it to be in the first paragraph, rather than a side note. BUT, elsewhere in the setting you indicate crystals are seen (now) as both magic and technology. The idea of them believing they are magic, and realizing it's just advanced tech strikes a chord with me. I really like that idea, much more than the idea that people see them as both (though some people may see as magic and some as tech).

QuoteIn addition, the gods were no longer able to prop it up, as most of the pantheon was for taking a more detached role.

Divinely inspired technology like the Chromatic Oligarchy used could not be used as-is by any means, and required substantial reverse engineering and filling in of details before it could be reproduced in any form in the northern states. [/quote]
I think you're missing a word or something in this sentence. Do you mean "like that produced by the Chromatic..."?

I like the contrasting viewpoints at the end. It lends the event a sense of historical realism, whereas a purely progressive advance (with a strawman argument against it) would seem constructed.

Crystalstar Crunch
Only glanced at this since you say it's dated. There's actually a term for a woman multiple husbands: polyandrous.

Demons
Love your demons, but I know I read this before, so I assume I commented before. Not sure the reference to Lawful Stupid is necessary to get your point across, and mentioning it does evoke D&D, which since you don't use it, seems a bad thing to me.

Desert League
Since this is one of the more interesting political organizations, I'd say expanding should be a priority. I don't see anything on this page that we didn't already talk about, though.

Diaspora

QuoteMeta Note:
I've left it an open question as to whether the "humans" of this setting actually evolved here, or if they're not actual human humans, which means they were brought there from Earth somehow. I've also left it an open question when Crystalstar takes place, if it even takes place on our time line at all.

Though it's not clearly entirely what happened, it seems clear that the founders of the Coalition were banished from Vyea at some point during the era of the Chromatic Oligarchy, and returned after the Crystalline Revolution with advanced technology and a grudge. It is not known if there is something remaining of the United Coalition somewhere out there. [/quote]
The first sentence uses "clear" twice which sounds odd (and it shouldn't be "clearly entirely"). Are we talking about the continent of Vyea or the planet?

Getting back into this... :)

Quote from: Phoenix

Quote from: Chromatic OligarchyThe amount of dogma and religious ceremony started to increase exponentially, no doubt abetted by minor members of the Choir of Ten Thousand who were quite pleased at the amount of praise and honor they were receiving. Eventually, the Oligarchy simply collapsed under its own weight.[/ic]

Quote from: PhoenixBecause you don't know or the answer, or because you don't want to reveal it to your players? If the former, I'd say give it some thought, since it could be another cool feature.

So if not even Varrdyen has the tech to build spaceships, where do human starfarers come from? If there are people from other planets landing on Vyea regularly enough to be celebrated rather than feared, I think you should mention it on the main page. It really changes the feel of the setting for me.

This is something else I've kind of wrestled with, because to get the "sword & planet" feel, as well as the inspirations from Stargate, Dune, etc. that I definitely want, there needs to be some kind of spacefaring. However, it doesn't need to be, and indeed, shouldn't be, front and center. I definitely don't want it to get to the point where it "really changes the feel of the setting." So there has to be some degree of balance-- perhaps it's something like voyages of exploration during the 16th-18th centuries, or the like.